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The orca A story/poem

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 9:41 am
by fredriksam
I have done a poem/story about an orca (killer whale) that i wanted to share with you guys. It kinda sad but hopefully you will like it.

THE ORCA:

The orca is swimming in the ocean.

He is 3 years old.

He throw himself up to the surface and lands in a deafening splash.

He is free.

He is chasing a fish.

His big heart beats.

The family is near him.

They swim together.

they have no time to look after.

They are free.

Suddenly the orca get caught in a net.

He cant swim from there.

The net is going up.

He is taken from his home.

The family calls him.

He is trying to calling back.

Its too late.

He is catched.

The travel is long.

The orca is afraid.

No one is there to sooth him.

His big heart beats.

After a long time he sees water again.

Its a swimming pool.

He is swimming in it.

Its not big.

He is calling the family.

No one answers.

He gets food and is trained by a trainer.

He is trying to jump high but cant.

He is showing himself for the public though.

The applauds is thundering.

He just wants back to his family.

He must always do tricks same day same time.

Hours is turning to days. Days turning to weeks.

Weeks turns to months, Months to years.

People applauds.

His big heart beats.

He gets sick by the chlorine water.

No one notices.

He gets even sicker.

Neither the public or trainers notice.

He is only their milkcow.

He is calling desperatly for help.

No one hears, No one is coming to his aid.

He is truly alone when he dies.

His big heart starts to slow down.

Down..

Down..

Suddenly he comes to the orca heaven.

His family is there.

They also got captured.

He is calling them.

Everyone answers.

He is happy to be in heaven.

The public is sorrowful.

Some investigastion shows his last hours was horrorful.

The public boycott the park for a while.

Months later they have a new orca.

The public comes and cheers. No one remember the old one.

They are after all there to entertain us....
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Hope you liked the story.

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2006 5:21 am
by fredriksam
Did you guys like it or not? I,m sad if i dont get replies on this :cry: :cry: :( :( ?? :?

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2006 9:57 am
by Morkulv
I quit reading after 10 lines...

Sorry. :D

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2006 8:42 pm
by Anubis
Morkulv wrote:I quit reading after 10 lines...

Sorry. :D
dude ouch!

dude it was cool it was just a little odd, i was kinda new this poam and story thing

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2006 10:26 pm
by Scott Gardener
A pretty emotional piece, strong in its straightforward simplicity.

It's quite good; sorry it got overlooked the first time. Thanks for banging us over the head and having us take a second look.

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2006 10:37 pm
by Miguel
Cool Poem fredriksam!!